Wednesday, October 30, 2013

Fear

                             Fear is dark grey, black and navy
 You can see people cowering in their homes and houses staring at you with hatred.
You can hear high pitched screams and animals growling in the distance.
You can smell sad salty tears and smoke pouring out of windows and doors.
You can see a tornado of fear whistling through the air.
You can taste mouldy old fruit and stale dry biscuits.
Fear is terrible!
Josh C
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4 comments:

  1. grantsbraesNovember 10, 2013 at 5:10 PM

    This is a very good poem because it shows lots of verbs to describe fear and nice work for involving the five senses it gives it a touch. Next time try to add a simile.
    From Harry

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  2. grantsbraesNovember 10, 2013 at 5:13 PM

    The metaphor helps finish off the poem and the strong adjectives help show a clear picture in our head.

    Maybe next time add the sense taste?

    By JABARI and CORY

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  3. grantsbraesNovember 10, 2013 at 5:15 PM

    Good descriptive poem there were lots of strong verbs in there and try add a personification

    From MAX and Mason

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  4. grantsbraesNovember 10, 2013 at 5:18 PM

    Thanks Jabari & Cory will add one when finish publishing

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